Re-Writes..."The Walk"

"the other day i saw this girl at the mall that made me do a double take. i was in the music store, looking at some cd singles. i wanted a love song i had heard on the radio. the selection wasn't very good but i found what i was looking for. ready to leave, i glanced up and she was right across the rack from me. now i don't use the word "fine" very often, but this girl easily fit the, no, my definition. she was about 5'6" or 5'7", hispanic-looking, long black hair, wearing a tight, clingy summer dress. without even talking to her, 2 of the 5 b's i require of a potential mate were fulfilled. she definitely had a body, but her face was, no exaggeration, perfect. when i think of hispanic beauties like salma hayek, jennifer lopez, and penelope cruz, etc., this girl certainly belongs up there with these women, maybe even the top. she was fine. fine enough to make even the most timid of people, me, want to say something to her, maybe even ask for her phone number. but two big hispanic-looking guys were standing behind her, talking like they were with her, so i tried to sneak glances across the rack while pretending to still be looking for a cd. after a while, i realized the guys weren't going to leave the girl's presence, so i left the music store. i walked around the mall for a time and eventually i found myself walking out of the music store again. i looked up and saw a girl walking away. i recognized her immediately. and those two guys were nowhere to be seen. i was in a state of shock as she continued to walk away. i couldn't stop staring at her. there was something about her walk. it was perfect, 110% feminine. she had the perfect stride and armswing. the way her butt switched from side to side mesmerized me. like i said before, her dress was tight. the whole sight of her made me do something i've never done before. i began to follow her, soaking in her essence. it was nirvana, ultimate euphoria. i was almost completely zoned in to her, i almost couldn't see anyone else in the mall. then i heard my name. my mom was standing in front of me and the girl disappeared into a crowd. paradise lost in an instant. i still see the image of that girl walking in front of me. like i said before, perfect."



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